I am going to do something that is scary for any creative-type to do. Since I am not creative, I am going to share unfinished, unpolished, and un…good work. As you may know I have been working on a graphic novel with Curt Merlo. I did some writing last night for one of the opening scenes. I am posting it here for you to read. I would love feedback, but at the same time remember that this is about one page of 200 and that its a first rough draft (now I’m done talking it down so when you read it, you can say “no its great” and I can get my reason for existance from your heavily lauded praises).
Without further ado:
EXT. VALLEY - DAY
A herd of cattle can be seen grazing in a large grass pasture. In the distance, jagged blue mountains pierce the sky. A close up of the cattle shows one cow eating right behind another one. The cow drops a huge load right in the spot the other cow was just eating. The cow slowly lifts his head looking upset and turns away. Another small group of cows is seen eating. A low buzzing sound is heard as a fly passes over a cow. The cow tries to swat the fly with its tail, but misses. The buzz slowly increases until it is full bore. Suddenly a swift moving object splits the slow, stupid cattle. Dusts flies up around the unknown rider. His body crouched, his head low, he rides like he is fighting the rotation of the earth itself. His poncho flies behind him like a cape. His face is covered with a bandana but his intense and deliberately focused eyes can be seen. The rider is known to those who don’t know him, which is almost everyone, as THE LOST BOY. Seeing some sinister looking silhouettes in the distance, he pulls a wheelie on his modified dirt bike and comes down accelerating. He then slowly pulls two saddle rifles of his back and aims them straight into the face of the camera and though it would seem impossible whizzes past even faster. A shot rings out and the back bike tire explodes. Reacting quickly the Lost Boy hits the brakes on the bike and just before crashing, jumps off. He lands on his feet like an olympic long jumper, facing a group of five men, who suspiciously look like they knew he was coming back. Meanwhile the group of men, known as “THE GOOD OLD BOYS” are spending a regular afternoon working on their 1967 Chevy C-10, before the rider approaches. The leader, JOHNNY ROTTEN, is working on the engine with the hood up. Another SHEP, is working under the car on his back. BILLY, sitting in the back nursing a beer and a cigarette, begins to slowly stand, reaching for his gun.
BILLY
Johnny? I think someone’s coming.
Johnny pokes his out from under the hood straining to focus on a figure in the distance. Shep, a long skinny farm boy, wearing overalls and a train conductors cap over shaggy straw-like hair, slides out from underneath the truck.
SHEP
What is that?
BILLY
I don’t know, but it’s moving quicker than two frogs on a banjo.
SHEP
(looking at Billy)
What?
JOHNNY
Well I’ll be… (interrupted)
A shot rings out from behind them. It startles Billy and he drops the beer. ROD, a medium build redhead with handsome looks and a cocky smile, walks up from behind the truck carrying a buffalo rifle.
ROD
Yee-hoo, I think I got me a big one.
BILLY
(sarcastically)
Look pop, that man shot himself that squirrel, rightthenthere, isn’t he so tuff?
ROD
(to Billy)
Your next dipshit.
The dust clears in front of them and the figure of the Lost Boy stands holding two Winchester “yellowboy” rifles. The good ol boys step away from their spots on the truck and step forward, lining up in front of the figure.
To be continued…I hope to bring you updates from time to time and always remember to check curtmerlo.blogspot.com.